Posted by: Nikku December 18, 2004 03:05 am

[Note: Strath Haven middle school is real, all students are real.] Chapter One: The Day Spanish Class Sucked More Then Ever I walked in through the door of room 101 aka hell, when the bell rang. My Spanish teacher was a full blown Jackass. "Nico, you're Late, you have a detention" He said. "Mother Fucker." I whispered. The Spanish teacher looked me in the eyes and pointed to a desk. I walked over to the Desk and sat down, and began my normal day dreaming routine in Spanish class. Goddamn, What made Mr. Guatch such a jackkass. All the kids called him Mr. Douche. Everyone hated him. I started to drift of into the never ending void of sleep, one good thing about having hiar in front of your eyes is well, that you can sleep in boring classes. "Nico, pay attention!" yelled Mr. Douche. "My real name is Nick not Nico or whatever." I answered back. "Fine, wiwse guy, another detetion" Mr. Douche siad. After 20 minutes of Hell i realized something was wrong with Chris is the front row. He fell out of his desk and his head hit the floor. He jsut layed thier for about 5 minutes when someone, I think it was Jasmin the Girl next to him siad "Chris What the heck-". She was Cut off by chris jumping up and letting out a Loud, ear drum breaking, Blood curtling Scream. All I could say was "What The Fuck?" Before Chris jumped at Mr. Douche and started ripping him into shreds the only thing i could think to my self was "Awwwww, Fuck. What should i do? This sounds like something out a a Zombies movie. What is the place with strong doors? The Gym." I jumped out of my seat Grabbed my Firend Charlie and Anthonoy and Told them my plan. WE darted out the room. We changered up the stairs. We where on the secound floor. then we saw the stairs to the main floor. We jumped down all 10 of the stiars and darted to the Gym. Once we where in the gym we shut the doors and Locked them with the huge steel bars. There were 4 sets of movable bleachers. all 3 of us moved on in front of each door. We went into the Sport Exquitement closet and looked for anything to arm our self with. -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Posted by: Nikku December 18, 2004 04:15 am

FEED BACK, COMMENTS, ANYTHING

Posted by: BrainStew December 18, 2004 04:29 am

I like it. The spanish teacher in the story sound like my french teacher. I have long hair too so I can also fall asleep without them knowing

Posted by: Nikku December 18, 2004 04:31 am

THANKS ! i love when ppl love my stories, that Spanish teacher, along with another and charlie are real names and real people, i got sick of the Mr. Douche (WE really do call him that, but english is his 5th luange so it sounds the same to him, god i hate mr. Douche) so i wrote story, story aint over yet i need to take a break then there will be more!!!!

Posted by: Nikku December 24, 2004 12:56 am

FEED BACK!

Posted by: Outlaw289 December 24, 2004 02:17 am

I think they shoudl have responded with a little more confusion. Let Chris tear up a few more kids before you and your buds catch on. Also, make it so the police have to come rescue you or something.

Posted by: Lord_Of_The_Pings December 24, 2004 07:39 pm

Excellent story, but maybe your "heroes" for want of a better term should take as many people with them as possible I sure as hell know that I would (especially the girls ). So far this story has a lot of potential, go with it!

Posted by: Nikku December 24, 2004 07:57 pm

ok well i feel inspired, --------------------------------------------------------------------- ------------------------------------ COmments?

Posted by: Lord_Of_The_Pings December 24, 2004 08:21 pm

Take your time a bit more, for example think about lockers being knocked over, fire alarms, perhaps the possiblity of other students thinking and comming up with ideas, instead of being helpless sacrifices in the plot of the story. Also perhaps your group can have some more charachters, like school psychopaths and chemistry freaks, hell even cheerleaders, I mean someone's gotta do the handywork and of course the screaming ;D Keep up the good work.

Posted by: Nikku December 24, 2004 08:54 pm

nigger cock

Posted by: TheSecondOne December 25, 2004 12:41 am

Violence! Hooray!

Posted by: moecomputer December 26, 2004 03:20 am

Your story is totally funny.

Posted by: Nikku December 26, 2004 03:36 am

thanks, what is the most LOL part?!

Posted by: Grey Snake December 26, 2004 09:18 pm

when you and katy kissed. In real life is she your girlfriend or do you have a crush on her? anyways its really good. Please keep it up!

Posted by: Grey Snake December 30, 2004 08:43 pm

you gonna finish?

Posted by: Nikku December 30, 2004 10:10 pm

ugh, later. Been workin on How does it feel, but i'll finsih this one

Posted by: Grey Snake December 30, 2004 10:18 pm

So katie....is she you girlfriend or do you have a crush on her?

Posted by: Nikku December 30, 2004 10:52 pm

lol half/half

Posted by: Private Wolvenrage March 20, 2008 02:12 am

Pretty good... when you gonna continue for god sakes???

Posted by: Neal Ovdensson March 21, 2008 02:01 am

Is very interesting. Here's hopin' things work out for your protagonist. Though, if I may, the whole sword fight, though entertaining, seemed a bit superfluous. But hey, that's just my opinion. Other than that, everything else is very well done. I like it.