I lived in a quiet city of nice neighbors and great houses. My name is Pete Hassel and I currently work with the S.W.A.T. SpecOps. I heard rumors of a chemical refinance have problems with some experiment. The experiment was a fluid that stenched as bad as what it really does. As the rumor continued, pople said the "Virus" multilates your skin and damages the brain. I didnt know what to belive.

I figured that answer on the day of October 10;The Experiment did have problems and from that day in only a week it was affecting people of the city. The day of the dead most survivers called it. Only 1/3 of the people in this city are alive only 24 hours away from the problem. As Horrible as it seemed, us survivers had to fight off the infected people of the city I once loved like many others, now its the City of the Dead.
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This is only the prestory and I want you posters to criticize this story, and tell me if you need it to be started.

Pretty cool!

Well, very little to criticize really.

~Work on vocabulary; use bigger words
~Much longer please!
~Longer sentences, because as of now they're a bit...baby-ish
~I know it's a prologue, but it still needs to go in a little bit more detail...is it pretty much like RE 2+3, or what?

I hope my suggestions help you improve some. By all means post more of it!