Hi all this is my first post in this forum. Sorry for my bad english. Please read this and give feedback. Thanks.

(About the usual title..im not good at making up names )


Heavensgate
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It was a morning in Heavensgate, John was frying bacon and eggs. His room-mate, Joe was waching tv. Suddenly the tv shutted off, "What the hell?" Joe yelled, he went outside the house to look at the antenna and found it broken. "John, the antenna broke down, im going to fix it" he yelled, he got no response but didint pay any attention to it.

"How did it broke down all this sudden..?" Joe tought, while he was fixing he noticed how quiet it was out there, still he did not pay much attention to it, he went back inside the house.

"It should work now!" he yelled, no response, he saw John eating the bacon at the table. "John? John?!" he went step by step closer to him, "John what.." suddenly John turned to Joe, jumped in front of him, "John?! what are you doing? John answer me! John!!" Joe yelled, his voice was getting high pitched, he fell down terrified as John started hissing "John.." he realised John was not going to respond, what happened to him he did not understand.

John started walking towards him, first slow then a little faster..then a littl faster again untill Joe was cornered. Joe was confused, terrified, scared, but whit a flow of adreanile he jumped towards John hitting him to the floor, "Wake up, John, Wake up!" he yelled allmost crying while he was shaking him. John hissed and threw him throw a window.

Words why and how raced in his mind. Then he woke up, his clothes torn up becouse of the window shards. "I dont know whats going on, but i have to get out of here" he tought and started running.

"Somebody, help me, please help me someone" he yelled but noticed there was no one at the streets besides him. No one....

sounds good some spelling erros,you need to describe the atmosphere and what it felt like,and you need to explain why John suddenly turned into a zombie...like did Joe see him go outside for a moment and runback inside and John makes some lame excuse why he ran inside,and Joe notice he has bite marks on some part of his body.

Ahh, yes, why he turned into zombie will be explained later in the story, i have planned this a bit

Yes i will try improve athmosphere, i wrote that yesterday night and was in a hurry

Thanks a lot for the feedback!! ill start writing it now again

lol, JOHN JOHN!

//mr.burns voice

Excellent!

Change
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Joe just stood there, starting at nothing for a while. Suddenly strange smell filled his nose, "What? Smells like rotten lemons" he said quietly. All out of sudden he yelled "Shit!! i got it!", took a piece of paper from his pocket and covered his mouth and nose whit it. "I must get up! up to the roof where that gas cant go!" he tought fast and started running back to his house, he didint see John so he climped to the roof. "Phew!" he said reliefed and took the paper off.

He sat down and started to think. "That was some sort of gas..poison, that would explain why John...changed. And probaply everyone other. Who did this? terrorists? maybe.." Then he heard hissing. Lots of hissing, he jumped up and started looking for a weapon, there was none. "Oh god.. John?" he whispered, but nothing came up, nothing moved, nothing hissed. Joe's eyes moved wildy and he started to sweat, "Come out John.." he whispered and took a few steps forward to the edge, then a hand grabbed his leg and pulled him off "Shit!" was all he could cough up before falling to ground. Ex-John smirked and started bashing Joe to the ground. "Get your filthy hands off me you piece of shit!" he yelled in a flow of adreanile and kicked John away, Joe stood up and in a rage allmost ran to him but then turned and ran away; "What i am doing...there must be a cure..besides he's a lot stronger than i am!"

Then he coughed. And coughed again. "The gas! shit i forgot!" he tought, suddenly e stopped running, he couldnt move. "God help me.." he whispered, then he felt a sting in his throat, and fell down.
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Darkness..where am i? dead? zombie? no..im a live! He opened his eyes and saw figures in front of him. "Are you allright buddy?" one of them said, Joe tried to say he is but he couldnt get a word from his mouth. "Its allright, we stunned you whit a dart gun before you could..well you know, change" the other figure said. "Rest now, youll be allright" the figure ordered, and closed the door. It was dark again.

Yes im bored..heres a little more. Thanks to everyone who reads this again


Allies or Enemies?
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I(Joe) Had terrible nightmares last night, and now i have a headhache.. Atleast im alive, thanks to the two guys who saved me. Did they say whit a dart? maybe its a cure to it? i have to go ask them.... Joe stood up and walked slowly towards the door, it was locked. "What? Hey! Open!" he yelled and started bashing the door. He stopped, "Its silent..." he whispered, he searched the room for something to use as a weapon, he found a small pocket knife, "Well..better than anything" he tought and putted the knife on his belt. He yelled a few times again and then kicked the door, but it didint move an inch.

"There is no windows here, not like i could escape out becouse of the gas..i just have to bash the door untill it breaks" The door eventualy broke down, "Good thing it was made of wood." he tought and jumped to the next room that seemed to be living room, there was no one to be sighted, besides some blood at the floor. "It could be old, i mean when the people turned to those monsters...it doesnt look like fresh, thank god" he tought.

Suddenly he heard walking, no, running, he took his pocket knife out and started walking slowly towards where he heard the sound.. It was coming to him, but he was ready, this time.. He was ready...
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Now going to play something, will post more later, Cheers!

Come on ppl, read read!



Suprises
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The Voice was wery close, Joe started shaking but pulled it off, he jumped out of his hiding spot, just to see nothing.. Nothing at all. Joe was really getting nervous now; "What the hell was that now?" he tried to tell himself that it was just his imagination.. All was just his imagination...

Then he heard a loud bang, and a sting at his feet, he was shot! It hurted so much he couldnt keep his voice down so he screamed and fell down. "Oh my god!! my feet!" he yelled and started searching for the source of the bullet. He saw none so he crawled back to the living room, he was seriously bleeding, he was an easy target. "There has to be bandages here somewhere!" he tought and tried to crawl faster to something that looked like a First aid kit, but he found out it was just a gray box covered in blood, never the less he opened it and found a Revolver, and 6bullets. He loaded it and pointed it to nothing... "Where are you?!" he yelled, the pain was getting too big to bear, he was screeching his teeth and tried not to scream.

Then he saw three tall figures in front of him, Zombies? no they would be all over him if they would be. "Look what you did, he wasnt a zombie!" one of them said, "Our orders are to exterminate everyone who could be infected." said the tallest one of them. "Wait, exterminate everyone? who are you?! the army?!" Said Joe coughing, "Yes, Sorry bud, but i have to shoot you now" said the tallest of them again, he loaded his something that looked like a gun to Joe's now blurry eyes, "No!!Im not a zombie!" Joe yelled and pointed the revolver to the tall one. "Shoot me and ill shoot you!" he cried out desperately, The tall one seemed suprised and started lowering his gun. "Just let me end your misery, civilian, theres nothing you can do whit that leg." the tall one said, "You shot me in there, remember!?" Joe said whit a high pitch voice, the tall one raised his gun again to shoot.

.........


It seemed like an eternity, he was pointing the gun at me, should i shoot him or not? oh god, i dont want to die...!


Joe desided. He pulled the finger and the tall one fell to the floor dead. The other two were about to aim at him, Joe shot the other of them, he fell to the floor dead, too, but the third one took cover. Joe Shot but missed the third one, and then he jumped of his cover and shot a burst at Joe. Joe moved a little to the right dodgind a few of the bullets but two or more bullets hitted his chest.
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Is this the end for Joe? it seems so, but anything can happen!

The End..?
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Joe coughed blood out, no wonder; he had 3-4 bullet holes in him, the pain was so huge it didint matter how many holes.

His eyes closed. He was dead. He was at peace.

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Then his eyes opened, he jumped up and started hissing, "Oh my god!?" the soldier yelled and opened fire at EX-Joe, the bullets did no damage at all, Joe leaped at the soldier and smacked him to the wall. "Oof!" the soldier yelled, his gun, his only hope, slided away at the floor. The bleeding zombie smirked and was ready for revenge, untill something strange happened; John came in. The two zombie's hissed a while at each others letting the soldier grab his gun, he opened fire at Joe's head. What a mess.

John did not like the turn of events and started running to him, he fired a burst to John's head and he fell down instantly. "Sweet" he whispered quietly and smirked.


Who am i? you might think, well im called Phil, Private First Class, sent here to sieze whatever i encounter. And boy i did!

Phil, proud of himself kicked the bodies a few times, trying to hide how scared he really was, from himself. It was time to get to work, he picked up his radio and turned it on. "Unit 1 Reporting on, Unit 2 you copy?" he said. The only response was silence. "Unit 2 you copy?" he tried again. "Damn their radio must be broked" he said, but he knew, he knew that they were dead. He was alone.

He reloaded his M16 and walked out of the house. He putted his mask on and started breathing some oxygen instead of the Zombie gas, a fine choice.

The streets were like hell, the houses were burning, blood everywhere, but the scariest thing was that it was too silent. Where were everyone? Dead or non-dead, there was no one besides him there. He started walking to something that looked like a small shop, a little bit bigger than a kiosk. There was the body of the Shop keeper, or his remains. Phil tried not to worry about it and broke a candy machine and took some chocolate bars. "Mh, i love these" he whispered and did not hear the faint walking around him.

"Whos there?!" he yelled when he finaly heard the walking, then he understood what an error he made. Private First Class, Yes sir! He could hear the walking loud and clear now, he looked around and saw nothing. Then something fell from the roof crushing Phil to the floor.

To Be Continued..

....errr it was first from Joe view of point, and next it was Phil and now its something else....

damn it grey snake u crack me up.

Pretty good story, keep it up :D

Thanks, it wont end here

Wasnt it nice to kill the "main" charcter?

*Clap Clpa Clap* I like its so confusing no its a great story I maybe want to post a long 25 page story but its so long on each event so much detail.I hate that so I like to read alot of peoples storys ok good work though.

Discoveries
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Phil smellt the disgusting lemon odor so it had to be a zombie. The zombie stood up ready to finish him but desbite the pain Phil turned around and shot a burst at the zombie's head exploding it, blood splattered to the walls. "Puh, i have to be more careful from now on, that was too close." he tought. He sluggishly stood up, he started reloading his gun but found out that there was nothing to reload whit, he was out of bullets.

"Oh god, what am i going to do whitout any ammo? wait..there must be some place to get ammo here in this city, supposing id get there.." he filled his backpack whit food and went out the store and started searching for a gun shop, or something.

Wandering at the now empty and bloody streets were quite depressing, whit each step Phil started feeling more nervous, his senses were overloading, every little noise made him shudder. After some time of walking he started thinking where every zombie was, it was empty in the streets. He found out. He saw a big store that was crawling whit zombies, zombies falling down from the window, zombies piling up at the roof, zombies squishing through the gate, the building was full of zombies. "I wonder what they want from there... Maybe i should find out, but how am i going to get through them all?" he wondered. He got an idea, he had a few lemons at his backpack, he squished them to his hands and putted them to his face and clothes, then he just tried to look as much zombie he could. Suprisingly, it worked, the zombies did not care about him.

Once he got through the gate he started finding the reason why all the zombies were here. It was a big building whit many small stores and restaurants in it. After a while he discovered a "funny" thing. The zombies were shopping, eating, whatever you would do in a building like this! Phil allmost laughed but he holded it in. The memories of the past, the "ritual" of shopping must remain at the zombies brains, and thats what they were doing here, they picked up things, butted them in a basket and then putted them back. Phil saw some Ex Police corpses standing guard that no of the zombies would "steal" anything, but the interesting thing was that they had a Desert eagle each. Phil realised he had to snatch them somehow, but he would ofcourse get the attention of all the zombies near.

Bst storie evr.