A phone call is heard in the night...someone franticly speaks of creatures breaking into their mansion. The call reaches the police department, they act fast and send in a Special Force unit know as E.C.F which stands for Elite Counter Forces. To counter terriost attacks and other invasions.

Mysterious murders have tooken place around the small city of Angel Gates. A small city in the north east of the United States.

The Estate building consist of

- Mansion
- Green House
- Garden
- Excape Tunnel
- Attic

The team members of E.C.F

Bravo Team

Scott Crimson- Excellent Sharp Shooter and Captain
Joey Woodsen- Best Sniper of both Teams
John White- Vehicle Specialist and Pilot
Kylie Xavier- Medic
Ashley Jolt- Rookie and Normal Member

Alpha Team

David Sue- Captain and Good Sharp Shooter
Ron Mills- Medic
Vince Rogers- Normal Member
Patrick Jones- Sniper
George Hamiltion- Pilot and Vehicle Specalist

Bravo team plans to be sent in first, what awaits them at the Estate?

{Comments on how I'm doing so Far, also I did get some ideas from RE}

Not bad, love the name.

Btw: David sue would be better as, 'Sue david'. *He can be a gurly*

It took me some time to think the names up..

You got some ideas from RE? I'd never have guessed.

"...around the small city of Angels Gate. A small city in the north east of the united states". Dont need small city twice, just join the two sentences together;

...around the small city of Angels Gate, situated in the north-east of the united states


If someone has called regarding a break in to the mansion, and they've sent a special forces unit rather than just the cops, perhaps you could say something about political strings being pulled, or the estate being related to the government in some way.

Greysnake it is good but..... what happened to ur OTHER stories?

Blaze. I think yur looking into this too damn hard. Quote:If someone has called regarding a break in to the mansion, and they've sent a special forces unit rather than just the cops, perhaps you could say something about political strings being pulled, or the estate being related to the government in some way. End Quote.


Yur like this super-uber-author guy. With perfect spelling an everything. And you have too much of that professional author sense. but enough of that Grey Snake: I like it. Especially the thought put inot the forces. Im sick of hearing about "So my squadmate mowed him down" that kinda thing. Fellow soldiers are pple to! okay enough blabbing from me. BTW what happened to that other story about the civ protecting his family? nm good work on this one. man so much typing might as well continue my story shanagins

Just seems a little odd to send a counter-terrorist unit to deal with a house-invasion, unless theres some sort of ulterior (extra/unseen) reason for sending them to the estate.

nice work, Grey keep it up
dude, Blaze, why not see where the story goes wid the CT ppl bein called out? it might not b political at all...

This post has been edited by Keyes on February 04, 2005 11:20 am

Settle down. I like Blaze commenting with the Critsim.

He patches stories up.

true

grey snake, u posted more like the back of a book, Write A story!!!!! please This was no effence ment

Bravo Teams Chapters

Chapter 1- Plans

"Ok, we will first set down here then strike here..." Scott Crimson, captain of the Bravo team for E.C.F expained as he moved his skinny finger around a map detailing the Angel Estate.

"Now tell me why we are raiding this mansion..." John White the pilot grinned.

"Again...We are raiding this place becasue the Mayor of Angel City was there on a confernece meeting" Scott said with an irrated voice. Everyone nodded. Scott was the type of guy that liked to say something once.

"John, go and get the 'copter warmed up, Kylie, Ashley get kevlars and Joey get the weapons" Scott ordered his teammates. They all nodded and set to work.

Scott laid back in his chair for a minute and broswed through the pictures of
the murders. Each one had, had bite marks on them. Through scans they had come to a agreement that it was the jaws of Humans. Some of the murders had been casued by animals. Again identifed by jaws...

Kylie and Ashley opened the door to the locker room and picked up several pieces of Kevalars. They were going to need them to protect them from the cannabals.

"How do you like your first day?" Kylie questioned Ashley.

"Kinda scared.. with all these murders goin' around" Ashley told her. Kylie nodded and understood. They picked up several pieces and left the converstation. They walked out of the locker room, Ashley heard the loud creak as the door closed.

Joey picked up several cabients of weapons in his strong arms. He had always been known as "Strong" for his amazing strenth. They all met up as they walked towards the roof. Ashley and Kylie leading, Joey in the middle and Scott picking up the rear.

Kylie swung the door open and saw John through the glass grinning. She smiled and swung the side door of the helicopter open. By the looks of it, it was an Black Hawk helicopter she threw the Kevlar pieces down on the black surface and sat on one of the seats. The rest of the team hopped in and set what ever they had in their hands down.

John gave a thumbs up synol and lifted the helicopter up and took off. The team could see the small city below. All the great building standing tall and proud. They then started to skim over the Angel Forest. Until they couldn't see the city..they knew they were in for a suprise....


Feedback and Contructive Crtism on how im doing so far.

Chapter 1 of the story has now been complete.

Hey is this going to be like RE1? lol. Cant wait for chapter 2

AS I said..I got some ideas from Resident Evil. Here is how its going to be.

I will type up the chapters of Bravo Team and their raid on the mansion.

Then I will type Alpha Team's chapter about losing Bravo...haven't thought that far yet.


Also if you see something like

"Author: Man these guys aren't have much luck eh?"

Thats my words, they have nothing to do with the story. Its just my emotions etc...

Thanks for feedback.

Chapter 2 should be out sometime today or tom.