september 26th 2004

Dear diary,

I hate this place, ever since umbrella recruited me for my out standing work in biology and been top of my class , I have despised been hear. I have only been here a couple of days and I all ready wish i never came here. The Umbrella facility is located under racoon city , a massive network of labs and testing facilitys. This place is gigantic a person could easily get their self lost down here. The first experiment I had to undertake was assisting the head scientist "william birkin". I had heard about him, and he had achieved so much in his carrier. One of the things I had heard him talking about was the g-virus and t-virus, that they mutated any living organism infected with the virus's. The t-virus decaded the infected where the g-virus did unthinkable things to the organism.
If anyone found this diary i would probably be killed umbrella could not risk this getting out to the public, no one could know what they are doing down here no one.

september 27th

Dear diary,

Today i saw something going into one of the restricted labs, there was four large metallic boxes on a sort of loader. There was only one thing i could think of what those boxes could contain, People. The idea sounded extreme, I shouldnt even been thinking that it could of just been medical supplies.
The only thing they could want people for would be for testing.
Could umbrella really be this corrupt.

Plz give me comments on the story

Make it longer and sp it, but it looks good so far.

No effence or nothing I mean this in the nicest way, sorry if you find this offenceive,

Good Story and All, but why don't you make up ur own vass biologic Corperation? And your own ciy. Remember no effence meant. You are a good writer I think that you could mabey do the thing above!

september 28th

Dear diary,

I was awoken by the sounds of alarms this morning,the labratory had private bedrooms for the individual scientists. They were only small rooms with a desk locker and a bed, the rooms wernt decorated just a metalic floor and metallic walls very basic no frills. I headed out of my door into the long corridor with a elevator at the bottom of the hallway and a security office at the other end.
I saw another person down the hall in a dressing gown and called him over i asked him what the alarms are going off for and he said soemthing that nearly made my heart stop "probably another outbreak". We were interupted by the load sound of running foosteps, three men all wearing gas masks with blacked out panes. They were wearing big kevlar vests and carrying mp5's and brushed past me sending me flying back through my door back into my room smashing my head onto the floor nocking me unconsious.

niku stfu its a story set in the resident evil universe

Dear diary,

I woke up with a throbbing headache still laid on the floor, those loud alarms had stopped. What the hell is going on, theres no one around.
I put on my lab coat and unlocked my draw and took out my berretta. My trusted gun you nether know when u mite need one.
I headed down to the security office, no sign of anyone. The door wasnt locked and I went inside, the situation was getting stranger by the minute.
The room was empty there was a weapons locker but was empty, i could of done with one of those SMGS the three man were carrying. There was a desk and five monitors above it, all showing static nothing on the screen.

Don't mind what the others say. I think it was a great idea to make an story based on the journal of a scientist working with umbrella.

The only things I suggest are

Correct spelling errors
sperate your story in paragraphs
Add more admosphere to the story.


- Grey

QUOTE (Grey Snake @ Jan 3 2005, 10:06 PM)

1. Correct spelling errors 2. sperate your story in paragraphs 3. Add more admosphere to the story.

1. You can talk.
2. Isn't this a diary?.
3. Isn't this a diary?

Lets all calm down.....

its pretty obvious its set in resident evil world

i like it , but it looks very hard 2 do a stoyry like this with a diary aspect maybe slow it down a tad and have it as a palm pilot thingy organiser so u can tpye when u have a break from all the horrific killings and that



pred

Dear diary,

Strange things have been happening in the lab, scientists have been found dead and the unexplained alarms. I needed answers.
I went to the cafteria which is four floors above hear, there is three private quarters and the cafatreia it self.
The cafetria was deserted and there was a fowel stench and i could see food spread on the tables and on the floor.
I went to the counter and leaned over there was no sign of life. I hoped over and started to walk to the back of the kitchen. I could hear a faint squelching sound, and I walked round the corner to reveal a man knelt down over a dead body. His clothes had blood on them and were scratched. He was eating the dead body. He turned around and looked at me his eyes blood shot . I raised my gun but didnt shoot i was too frigtened. I noticed something in the corner of my eye, it fired at the thing two shots from a pistol and its head imploded.
It was a women, a scientist. She was wearing blue jeans and a lab coat holding a desert eagle. I asked her what that thing is and she replied " its a result of the t-virus infection, it turns the infected into these flesh eating, brain dead, walking corpses."My head was spinning i didnt know what to do at the time. " we have to get out of here" i replied
We was both startled by the pin of the elevator as we watched it come down the dial. The elevator stopped and opened its doors?

I wasn't getting upset at all, i am very calm about this subject, no need to use words like SHUT THE FUCK UP, though, just everyone, including me, should STFU and let the man countiune the story!

The diary stops from here and starts again because it could be a bit weird writing this part in diary form and I dont like writing the diary.

The doors on the elevator opened to reveal a strange black silhouette in the dark elevator. The light in the elevator flashed for a second and showed the unidentifiable object. A seven foot tall creature that looked like it could of been human at one time, it had a pulsating heart outside the body and was an irregular size. On its right arm it had long bloody claws extending out of its arm.
Its teeth yellow with plaque and drool dripping down out of its mouth, just grinning at us. Its eyes white with red veins clearly visible in its eyes. Its skin a dark blue colour with un-human sized muscles.
For a second or two the creature did not move , it stood there and breathed heavily with its hot breath coming out of its mouth like a steam train. The large beings grotesque claws clanged together in anticipation and freshly cleaved flesh and blood slithered off.
It breathed in and gave off a low pitched growl and lunged forward swiping its claws.