My name is Jack Winters. I am a member of the Zombie Counter Forces organization. We are sent around the globe to elimante all traces of flesh eating monsters codenamed "Zombies" It is if they are the undead. Along on our missions, I have experinced pain. Lots of my good men have been killed. Today's mission is to clean up a village in Asia. Somewhere in the middle of China. Our Organzation leader never tells us anything. He seems to keep a lot of secrets from us. What is he hiding?.......


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Very good original story continue continue

Nice story with a cliff-hanger.

Chapter 1- Crash
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"We are enroute to Sicoto Village!" The pilot called out to us. I nodded slighty and glanced around to my comrades.

"Nick,Joe,Bill,Ron" All the names of my friends in arms. We were riding in an black Hawk. I looked down over the door at the forest and jungles.

"Hate to get lost there...." I murmerd to myself.

"What was that?" Asked Joe. He looked at me funny.

"Nothing,Nothing" I said to him in a calm voice. We all had our weapons loaded. We wer equipped with Standard Mp5's and Bretta's.

"30 Seconds!" The pilot shouted to us.

"Only 30 seconds to go...." I thought to myself. As soon as we reach the ground we would have to split up into teams and go on a "Zombie Hunt."

"What type of them zombies ya think are in this village?" Nick said in his texas accent. Every one of our missions had led us to cities,village,towns etc. All of the zombies there had differnt powers and speeds. Most of them were slow and only bit and scratched. My thoughts were soon enterupted when the pilot began to steer the joystick wildly.

"SOMETHING CAUGHT IN OUR TAIL!" The pilot screamed. The pilot suddenly lost control and we began to fall out of the sky.

"DO SOMETHING!" Bill screamed. Suddenly Ron fell out of his seat and out the door.

"RON NO!" Joe screamed.

"HES DEAD!" I grabbed his shoulders. Time seemed to slow down as we were crashing. I closed my eyes and hoped I would make it out of this.........

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....KEWL! I LIKE IT! heh...like the opener too. nice cliff hanger...and the whole "what is he hiding?" nice,the first chapter is great as well. MORE!

Part 1- Confused
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"Oh my fuckin head! Where am...I?" I put my hand on my head and looked around. There was nothing, but jungle and trees. I looked back to where we crashed. The pilot seat was covered with blood and, so was the windshelid. I looked inside and saw all my freinds laying inside,

"No...THIS CAN"T BE HAPPENING!?" I began to panic. Even though my ankle was sprained, I still limped about.

*Chirp,Chrip* I heared birds in the trees. I looked to see were they where, but saw none. I saw a small hill, to my right and began to walk towards it. As I reached the top, I saw a village below.

"Maybe the villagers can help me..." I hoped. I started to walk down the hill when I tripped over a something.

"What the..." I questioned myself. I picked up the wooden sign and it said something in chinese.

"Oh my god....." I looked over the sign again and at the village.

"No....please not be the village" The sign read...... Sicoto

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people around here are really lazy commentors
A little more details would be nice. * i l o v e details*
This story is building up good, to a "man with nothing to loose" kind-of style. You are spewing out stories man!
EDIT: that spewing stories bit is positive

Part 2- Entering Sicoto
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Decisions,Decisions.... Ether enter the dreaded village or limp back into the forest and starve to death?....I had made my desion up. I decided to enter Sicoto. I started to walk towards the fence in a half walk/limp way. My ankle was recovering. Suddenly i heard a grunt behind me.

"Who's there?!" I shouted. I turned around to realize I wasn't loaded. I breathed a sign of relif when I realized noone was there, but the smooth grass and the distant trees. Even though it was cloudy, this place would be beautiful if it wasn't for that spooky village. I then turned around to see my objective.

I was determined to make it out of this. I loaded my Mp5 and Bretta to protect myself from the zombies. I started to walk towards the village when a cool breeze blew over me. It sent a shiver my down spine.

I was near the front gate of the village when I saw a lock on it.

"hmm appears noone is getting in or out..." I thought to myself. Luickly I had my lock pick with me. I started to put the lock pick when I realized it was rusted.

"Great...." I said in a frustrated voice. I tried to brainstorm how to get the lock open. It was no use to climb the fense since there was barb-wire on the top of it. Suddenly the gate swung open and I was shocked for a moment, I glanced around to see what trick this was. Noone was around...I entered the gate and walked into the village. You could say it was dead...doors were open, tools and other things laid on the ground. As I walked around the village, I saw a large building the size of four houses put together. Bloody hand prints were smeared on the door handle. It had once been gold by the looks of it, but was now covered in blood from someone's own...Who's is it?

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Comments please!!! I need to know how my story is!!

Can you stop doing it in parts it's rather annoying lol, put it together .

It's pretty gd i just a better description of the town, like what type of buildings where these? Where they wooden, metal, large, was it a village, was it a city?

Chapter 2- On the Run!
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"Anyone in the house?" I said. I didn't get an answer only from my echo. As I walked in the middle of the room, I saw small benches with books still open. I looked towards the statue at the front of the room. I walked near it and slid my fingers across it. It felt cold and as I looked to my hands, they were covered in ash. I could see it was a statue of an Buddha. Suddenly I heard a soft moan come from the other room.

"Anyone there?..." I called. No answer, this time I just got the same moan again. I got my Bretta ready and began to walk towards the room silently. My foosteps still made creaking sounds, since the floor was cracked. As I walked into the room I saw a person against the wall in a pool of blood. The person had his hand on his stomach, which was bleeding badly.

"Stand Still" I said to him. He did nothing and put his head down. I knew he must be an zombie, since there was a deep wound on his shoulder. The person's hair was ragged and had dirt on it. His or shes clothes were torn and covered in blood. Suddenly the person lifted his head up and gazed at me. I opened my mouth in awe, he had bloodshot eyes and a scar across his nose. He smiled wickildy and sprang to his feet.

"Don't move!' I shouted to him. His hair tossed around like an rag doll's. He didn't make any move, but suddenly dashed forward. He quickly knocked me into the wall.

"Oof!" I cried out in pain. He was about to finish me when I raised my gun up. I closed my eyes and pulled the trigger, I heard a cry, then silence. I opened my eyes to see the person on the floor. His eyes stared at me then rolled back into his head. I looked to see if I had been infected...I wasn't. I stood up and went out the room, I jogged to the door and out of the church. I was horrifed when I looked to my left and right. More of them were coming out of no where. I looked to a barn and ran to it. I began to notice the zombies picking up speed. I tried to open the door, but it was stuck.

"Come on COME ON!" I began to panic as they got closer. I pushed harder on the door and it came un-to. I ran inside, noticing I was only an hair away from their grasp. I saw a ladder and climbed it, as I reached the top. I saw piles of hay and farm tools. I looked over the ledge and saw dozens of them in the barn. They gazed up at me and stretched their hands out for my flesh.

"Im safe..but for how long?" I breathed a sign of relif. How long would I last?

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chapters :

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WHAT THE FUCK?!

There are 2 parts in every chapter of the story. As you can see I started a new chapter.

good story

Part 1- Trapped
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I sat upstairs in the barn staring down at the zombies. I looked at how much ammo, I had and knew I didn't have much.

"Ya want THIS!?" I stretched my hand out towards them. They made all sorts of sounds strectching their hands towards mine just to get a taste of my flesh. I teased them for a little while and pulled my hand back. Suddenly one of the zombies grabbed the ladder.

"What the Fuck!?" I shouted at the zombie. He grabbed the ladder with both of his hands and began to put his left foot on the first step. I quickly aimed my Bretta at him and pulled the trigger. He fell back into the crowd. His "friends" didn't mind at all.

"Phew..." I said aloud. I noticed a Pitch Fork next to the hay. One of the zombies walked near it and grabbed a hold of it.

"WHAT THE..?!" I screamed.

"WHat kind of zombies are they!?" I thought to myself over and over. The zombie grabbed the pitchfork with both hands and looked towards me. He made a grunt sound and started to shuffle towards the ladder. I could see his clothes were tattered and his overalls stained in blood.

"Dumbass..." I called out to him. He said nothing and swung the pitchfork left and right. I observed closly as he swung it left and right and grunted to the crowd. He then turned to me and started to chop the ladder in two.

"No you BASTARD!" I screamed to him. He soon cut the ladder in two and grinned at me. I saw his bloody teeth, and saw that 3 tooths were missing. All of a sudden, I heard an explosion then silence.

"Huh?" I said. There was another explosion near the barn house. I heard voices then the sound of an vehicle. The zombies ignored me and saw new prey they ran towards it, and then there was the sound of gunfire then silence.........