November 25th.

:Civilian:
I remember trying to look around, seeing nothing but chaos as i lay on a hospital bed being pushed into the hospital, the screams growing slowly quiet as more people died.

Few hours later:
"Ouur, my head."
I looked around to see a dark scene, i was in a hospital, but how?
I could hear a noise of something snapping above me, but i could barely see anything, i stood up i was instinctively limping.
Just then, something catched my eye, i looked to my left to see a bed with a body covered in a blood stained sheet, as i limped towards it i heard the snapping noise above me.
I stood next to the body, laid my hand on the sheet pulled it slowly just as i heard heavy breathing above me, i looked up i tried focusing, i could just see something grey.
*Zing* the lights in this area sprung on, i looked up with my first reaction, i was shocked there above me on the roof was a pail body covered in purple veins moving like a spider accross the roof, each movement "she" made her bones made a snapping noise, Then she looked at me, Her face was pure white, black eyes and veins that looked like wounds.
She just kept staring at me, her force seems to move like it was breaking.
She managed to open her mouth showing her teethless gums.
"Welcome to my reality, Devil's tricks." she shrieked
She then dropped to the ground twitching her eyes constantly watching me, i quickly turned to the bed i was next to, pulled the sheet back and to see an atrocious abomination lunge at me.

And now i'm here, in the dark woods haunted by the zombies i had killed, they walk through the cabin and hide crying and crying.
I saw huge lights coming from heavensgate yesturday, like the signals you would see in the old batman cartoons...
I wonder wrether not togo, i do not fear dying just the torment i have to come when i die, to become "one" of these hauntings.

:Soldier:
I sat in the van just staring at my assault rifle and staring, i knew what was ahead, in the briefing they sad "Out-of-control men" but when we watched the news we knew what they were zombies, yeah i can't beleive im saying that.
I sighed and looked around to see only terrors on my allies faces too, just then one of the guys said.

"How do we kill something that's already dead?"

"Johnson look the f*ck around you, everyone is terrified out of their minds, think we haven't already thought that and other things, dammit man..." i replied

"Hah, all yo' are just ladeeees, i can't wait to waste some bullets, haha" Boasted dawson

"You prick, f*ck dawson we don't want to be battling zombies we want to be home with our families, f*ck sake dude i don't even know what's happening back home, you're as scared as the rest of us why ca..."

My lecture was cut short when the van pulled over and i heard the commander shout

"F*ck! Go, go, go... SHOOT TO KILL"

We crawled out of the truck like true men, but what we saw when we got out made most of us just stand still... fire and explosions everywhere screams from every directions, people on the floor crawling with tears of absolute pain.
As the army shot anything that close, i felt sickened..

"BREACH, Back me up, BACK ME UP!"

I ran towards the voice, i climbed up the hill looked down saw a swarm of zombies, that's when it hit me, they're after us.. Me.
I pulled out my gun and shot at every head i saw, ending many years of existance with a single shot.
Dawson ran down with a m60 screaming, he shot everywhere with his eyes closed.

"DAWSON, GET THE F*CK BACK HERE!"

Bam, that's when it spread through the army, dawson got bite, he turned and spreaded it.
Now me and dailey are in the woods, we thought it would be safest in the trees, we saw a cabin earlier, but decided to wait til day to check it out.
Ridley's been acting weird lately, i'm sure he's bite, i keep trying to bring it up in coversations but he keeps changing it, only tomorrow will decide our fate.
Something disturbs me in this wood, i constantly see people in the corner of my eyes and in the distance, at night i force my eyes shut because i know if i open them i'll see something, disturbing...
End of part 1.

This was an introduction to the characters, Part 2 will hold the action.

Pretty good, i like the way you describe the happenings from different persons point of views

Excellent Job! On a scale of 1-10. I give it an 9.

I updated the story.
Part two.

:Soldier:
I know i always tell my self to keep my eyes closed when i sleep, because there's something about this wood, but i couldn't help it and now ridley paid for it.
I heard noises below the tree, i knew something was there, i just had to look... so i did.
I kept my eyes partly shut then looked down through the branches, i could see someone.

"Hey, hey you!" I shouted

"Ohhhh god, what are you doing?!" Ridley whispered to me

I rushed down the tree to follow the odd person, ridley tried to do the same to keep up with me, but he slipt and fell down the tree, all i heard was a horrible 'SNAP!' he landed on his head.

"Ridley..."

I turned to him he was laid out on the ground, with a mask of fear on his face, his eyes staring into mine.
I looked up the tree and saw someone there i went berserk and just ran, pulling out my beretta, i left everything i had in the tree.
While i was in that tree me and ridley knew it but didn't say anything because we just wished it wasn't true, but we'd feel a heavy breathing on our neck and sometimes mumbles of "welcome to my reality... devils tricks"

"ruuuuuaaaaarrrrrr"

I look to my right to just see a huge ammount of zombies, it was the army checkpoint holding the zombies back from leaving the city, i shot and ran as fast as i could, i saw the cabbin...

:Civilian:
I felt myself going mad, sat in the chair next to the window in the pure dark, with sounds of crying all around me, but then i heard someone.

"HELP ME!"

I looked out of the window and saw a soldier running towards me, there was the freak from the hospital following him.

"Don't let him in, he hates you, he wants to hurt you, your ours!"

I heard that from the around the house, it sounded very deep and like it was a struggle to say it.
I looked back at the soldier wondering what todo, as i looked at him his face was blury the whole time.

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Part 3.

:Soldier:

"Let me in!"

The cabin was well bordered up, i could see many people inside the house, but no one would let me in.
I grabbed my beretta and ran to the back, there was a backdoor lightly covered with wood, i ragged it off as fast as i could and quickly put it up when i was inside.
It was very dark in side, i could hear slight cries and scratching, it was a long hall with 3 doors to side.
As i opened the first door and ran in with my gun, it was empty, i went to the next one and laid my head against the door and heard slight cries.
I kicked open the door pointing my beretta around.

"You can't kill them, they hate us, they haunt us..." Said a deep voice behind me.

"uh, Who are you!?"

I pointed my gun, i was sweating and scared.

"Me, i'm no one, and neither are you... Come, come to the living room, i'll make you something."

Oh great, i was in a haunted wood with the sound of my comrade's neck snapping running through my head and in a small cabin with a madman.

I went to the living room that consisted of 2 wooden chairs and a whole lot of rubble, i sat down constantly watching the kitchen.

"You've met her haven't you?" Said the odd guy.

"Sorry, what?!"

"She brung us together you know, devil's tricks, i worked it out now, i don't know why i didn't see it before"

*laughs*

"What the hell are you talking about..."

"She's in here with me, she says she enjoyed killing your friend"

"WHAT THE F..."

I quickly stood up pointing my gun, i looked at the guy, his head was a blur and he was alone...

:Civilian:

As he pointed his gun at me, i didn't feel no fear.

"Do... it now... or... we... will do it... to... yes... you... do it!" Said the voice in my head.

"My face is a blur to you isn't it, i've come to realise it's because we're not real..."

Then i lunged at him with my hands, i felt like a thousand men, i didn't know what i was doing.

:Soldier:

"Ahhh, what the f*ck"

I hit him with my gun, then tried to raise my hand but couldn't his strength was incredible, then i managed to run the gun to shoot him arm.

"ARRRRRR" He screamed.

I got up and ran for the door, to see what seemed like a thousand dead bodies.

"You can't escape, I host the devil."

I suddenly felt real faint when i saw lights flashing and the voices of men in battle.
That's when i woke up here a refuge, i must have been rescued, when i ask about the other guy they tell me, they found one other body that was too mutilated to indentify.
I can't stop thinking about that cabin, i plan togo back, it's driving me insane... i must."

:Civilian:

I sinned and i pay, "HA!"
Bullsh*t, now i'm stuck where no one can find, only thinking about the horrors ive faced and haunted by 100's of ghosts, they cry and scream at me... they're my friends.

To be continued.

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Holy sh*t thats good man! Execpt i didn't understand it to well but that's just me and im tired too soo ya

....hey...this is a different type of story...diff views KICKASS!!! hmm.. pretty good keep it up.

Also.. beside from being a good story... its dead.

Heh, thanks for the feed back but this story is as dead as the civilian.